Freitag, 25. September 2009

what makes me angry?

I will tell you a thing, that makes me very angry.
One thing, which makes me furious is, when my little brother or my little sister want to play with me, when I have to do my homework. They are a pest. For instance, when I have to do my english homework, they ran into my room and scream around, that I have to play with them Monopoly or other games. Then I get really angry and tell of with this little devils. And after this, they go to my parents and tell them under tears, that I punched them. They are damn liars! I'm so angry then and can't concentrate me for the homework. And when its the next day and I had english lesson and the teacher asked me for the homework and I didn't do it, I'm sad. And when I'm sad I have to eat and when I eat too much I'm angry of myself at the end. I know, maybe it's a little bit stupid, but I can't change it. I think many people have the same problems and I think I must get me a key for my room, then I have my silence.

1 Kommentar:

Guenter hat gesagt…

No comma before 'that'!
One thing which ... (no comma - the relative clause is important!)
g: my little brother wants ...
sp: English (all words derived from geographical names start with a capital letter)
t: they run ( a bit)
wo: I have to play ... with them.
exp: I tell them off / I tell of those little devils
exp: they tell them with tears
exp: I can't concentrate on my homework.
exp: And the next day when I have English and the teacher asks me for my homework and I haven't done it, then I'm sad.
exp: I'm angry about ...
exp: I think I must get myself a key for my room so that I have more peace while I do my work.

You describe this in a lively way. Nice! The biggest language problems are: vocabulary / the way you express some ideas and and a few basic grammar problems.