Sonntag, 11. Januar 2009

Aliens were killed by music!

Aliens were killed by Music!!!
by Elaisa Bawart
Yesterday a young boy and his grandma realized that grandma's country music could kill Aliens. They droved to the radio station and played there music there.
The grandma were listening her country music when the Aliens wanted to kill her. But because o this music the brains from the Aliens were exploded. So the boy and his granny drived to a radio station to played the music all over the world. And they also drove with their car an d a radio through the town to killed the Marsians. When the america army noticed, that the country musik could kill the bad Aliens, they played it on the loudspeakers.
The young boy and the grandma got a medal because they saved the whole world from the Aliens.
Some days ago everyone believed taht the Aliens came in peace. But when they met the Marsians thousand of of people were killed by them. Also the america president and his wife died. Nobody had a change to do anything against the Aliens.
Now all people are happy and save.

1 Kommentar:

Guenter hat gesagt…

Obviously you should say that the aliens were killed in your first paragraph. That's the main information really.

Obviously you cannot report about the medal in THIS report because it happens afterwards, i. e. after what you're reporting here.

I get the impression you didn't think about the structure of the report well enough. With reports you have to think before you write.

Be careful with grammar:
drive - drove
grandma was ...
incorrect sentence structure
to + infinitive! - to play / to kill

Be careful:
their - there
the heads of the aliens
to listen to something
to drive through town by car
to play it over the loudspeakers
the American president
chance / change